The overall message of my rough draft is fine, but I need to
refine my thesis and go more in depth with the topic. I did identify the
audience and the rhetorical elements like pathos, ethos, and logos. I did not
really answer why he used those elements to get his point across. I kind of
just touched the surface on all of the elements, when I need to dig deeper and analyze all of
my sources more for this rhetorical analysis paper. Since this is a rough draft
there are a lot of little grammatical mistakes and redundancy throughout the
paper that I am going to need to fix too. I could also probably work more on
the flow of the paper and add more transitions. The best way to do that is to
compare and contrast the articles to add kind of like a bridge that we talked
about in class. That way my paper can be less choppy when I am going from one
point to another. I forgot to add in text citations too, so I will need to go
back and fix that. Along with my annotated bibliography because I did not add a
description to the tweet like I did for the other two articles. I am going to need
make my essay longer because it is under word count and hopefully I can read it
over to spruce up some of my vocabulary. Adding that will probably help my paper flow better. Even with all of the things that I have to work on, I think that I have a solid starting point. My
sources are good and I have touched bases on how they relate to the message
that I am trying to get across. Once I fix everything that I mentioned before, get help from my peers in my peer mentoring workshop in class, and probably go to
the writing center then I think I will be ready to turn in my paper.
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